11/26/10 11:18:22PM @slarou:
Mixposure always ask me to write 5 reviews EVERY time i wanna upload ONE song.
I feel like a REJECT(I never paid a cent here) according to this attitude.
So...You sadly are a victim of this.You recieve this review I composed to copy 5 time.
BUT... I will be back to you soon with my NATURAL words
11/26/10 08:19:44PM @:
I liked the song a lot, and the arrangement too, it reminds me of early Chilliwack for some reason, maybe its the cool guitar and great vocal.
Constructive?> I am no expert and often donot follow my own advice but here goes
- I did not like some parts of the lyric as I thought it a bit assuming and specific almost preachy and demanding towards the end.
Philosophically I would rather have steered it toward something less specific and more positive and perhaps less judgemental of the listeners mental condition or status. Progressive rock which is suceessful has most usually been more romantic and fanciful.
Not to say your current approach doesnt work or would not appeal to some. Listeners like things which are pleasurable, thats what its all about...give them pleasure, dont point out potential faults. If we must speak to listeners directly I beleive it should be specific to a fictional person in the song or as to humanity in general. Who is the singer speaking to? Himself?
I do think the song has great potential but feel the lyric needs more work. That is make the specific more vague and the vague parts more specific so it is unified somewhere in the middle. Ride the Wind is potentially a good hook.
11/26/10 06:33:57PM @bri-an:
oh yes. this stopped me dead in my tracks. very fine example of natural talent both in writing and performace.
Every once in a while, an instant gem can be created...influences of Led Zepp and Yes combined with your very contented vocal delivery, instantly puts this toon in my new "keep er eyeballs on this talent" list.
refreshing to hear a toon of this caliber.
welcome to the mix, Excellent work, highly recomendable!.
b
Mixposure always ask me to write 5 reviews EVERY time i wanna upload ONE song.
I feel like a REJECT(I never paid a cent here) according to this attitude.
So...You sadly are a victim of this.You recieve this review I composed to copy 5 time.
BUT... I will be back to you soon with my NATURAL words
I liked the song a lot, and the arrangement too, it reminds me of early Chilliwack for some reason, maybe its the cool guitar and great vocal.
Constructive?> I am no expert and often donot follow my own advice but here goes
- I did not like some parts of the lyric as I thought it a bit assuming and specific almost preachy and demanding towards the end.
Philosophically I would rather have steered it toward something less specific and more positive and perhaps less judgemental of the listeners mental condition or status. Progressive rock which is suceessful has most usually been more romantic and fanciful.
Not to say your current approach doesnt work or would not appeal to some. Listeners like things which are pleasurable, thats what its all about...give them pleasure, dont point out potential faults. If we must speak to listeners directly I beleive it should be specific to a fictional person in the song or as to humanity in general. Who is the singer speaking to? Himself?
I do think the song has great potential but feel the lyric needs more work. That is make the specific more vague and the vague parts more specific so it is unified somewhere in the middle. Ride the Wind is potentially a good hook.
oh yes. this stopped me dead in my tracks. very fine example of natural talent both in writing and performace.
Every once in a while, an instant gem can be created...influences of Led Zepp and Yes combined with your very contented vocal delivery, instantly puts this toon in my new "keep er eyeballs on this talent" list.
refreshing to hear a toon of this caliber.
welcome to the mix, Excellent work, highly recomendable!.
b